I’ve had it up to here with Covid-19
I wash my hands and clean, clean, clean.
I’m scared of closeness.. Keep your distance, I say
and if someone gets too close, I run away.
Whatever you do, don’t cough, sputter or sneeze
anywhere near me, and, NO! do not wheeze.
I’m a bundle of nerves, all jangled and taut
and am scared of seeing anyone when I go for a walk.
If I self isolate anymore than I do
I’ll become lonely as an animal caged in a zoo.
So open up the stadiums, liberate the pubs.
I’m going a little crazy, rub-a-dub dub.
I like it, but it could be better … As an editor of words, I’d say the same about almost every poem I read … A perfect poem (when edited further) for the anthology I’m working on!
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thanks Carolyn, I appreciate your honesty .I feel too that it could be better but at this stage I don’t know how 😦
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I have few ideas about tightening it up more, and making it scan better, John, and will be happy to share a further revised version with you. Just let me know, and I can work on it, and send it back to you to see what you think.
Many thanks for getting involved in this idea.
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Yes Carolyn; I will welcome your suggestions: you can let me know here or via facebook
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Facebook message it will be tonight or tomorrow. Many thanks. I think I’m going to enjoy this new phase in my writing/words life. Being an Editor, from community newsletter (Mallala Crossroad Chronicle) to this new bigger thing …
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Love it, John:) Open up the stadiums, liberate the pubs/ Life has lost all meaning/ Craving hugs not swabs!
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thank you; I still like my ending with its hint of loopiness but I like yours too; will let the editor decide 🙂
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Also, you’ve inspired me:) https://helpincoronatimes.wordpress.com/2020/04/23/what-really-annoys-me-is-that/
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I’m ahead of you; have already visited and commented ; you’ve got to keep going; your work is so good. I see you’ve only been posting a short while so you will grow followers
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