
You really have to lift your game, I say to my poems:
pull the finger out, push the envelope, think outside the box;
you’ve been resting on your laurels too long.
Other poets are doing amazing things with words,
smashing them together like neutrons in a Hadron Collider.
Get this: ‘these widowed months’, ‘the dents of highway laughs’,
and my favourite: ‘the soul is a runway for anything willing to fly’.
Whew! they say. Is that all you can say? I say.
Will you try a little harder? I say to my poems. Come on, guys.
For the Home Team. They look a little hesitant, abashed.
I don’t know, they say. It’s just not us.
We’ve been through this before. Okay, okay , I say. I’m sorry.
Just be yourselves. Just occasionally, Huh? Would it hurt?
They look at me. Give me the thumbs up.
Then I play them Slowly Slowly’s ‘Jellyfish’ as a stimulant.
They light up, move to the music.There’s hope for them yet.
* quotes from Bob Whiteside’s blog: naïve haircuts
I feel your frustration. Most days, I feel like my brain is an echo chamber for other people’s pretty phrases. Or I get some word stuck in my head and every time I try to think about being poetic this word slams its hand up like a goody-two-shoes but without any answers to back up the hand.
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I can absolutely relate to this John. Excellent as always 👏
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I think the answer is to accept the poet that we are; but it’s okay to give that poet a little nudge now and then 🙂
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We are who we are, poetry and all, but nothing wrong with a shakeup now and then –
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LOL 🙂 🙂 🙂 very wise. Beth; well, I gave my poems a good old shakeup and I must say they took it in the spirit in which it was given 🙂
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To be able to write anything would be good right now 😉🤣
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oh Juliette, I’m sorry; that’s a bugger of a state to be in; surely there’s something niggling you that you could write about, perhaps even the state of not having anything to write about? it’s been done before but I’m sure you could put your individual twist upon it 🙂
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I’ve written about it myself many times 😂
I just need some quiet and it seems 4am was good for that! I’d not says it’s good, but it’s something 😀
I love your poems, they often take me outside myself and that’s a rare treat 🤗
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thank you; that’s lovely 🙂
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John, this is wonderful. This is a perfect poem to read before we start to write, to make sure we are not too comfortable. And thank you very much for including some lines from a poem of mine. It really means a lot you would think they were worth quoting. Thanks!
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Terrific, Bob; stay in touch 🙂
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John, you’ve got nothing to worry about. Your poems are good!
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thanks for that, Neil; keep that camera of yours busy 🙂
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John, I love reading your work. It always uplifts me! Truly! And this one in which you addresses your poems and beseech them to rise to the occasion is no exception. I love it.
Do you follow Michael Jordahl? For some reason, I thought of you when I read this one: https://michaeljordahl.wordpress.com/2020/11/23/paper-planes/
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thanks; I’ll tell my poems — they’ll be chuffed over the gentle reprimand I visited upon them yesterday 🙂
and yes I visited Michael’s blog and loved it; left a few comments; a real find 🙂 so thanks for that too 🙂
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Oh. This. I adore it. David Byrne asks the musical question: Well, how did I get here?
After telling my son-in-law of a year writing drabble, I searched Twitter. A few taps later, here you are with this poem. Thank you.
And dang it. Must write.
Be well, John Malone! 😊
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thank you; good to hear from you 🙂 and yes, I love David Byrne as the front man of ‘Talking Heads’ but realize he has a new artistic life now; it’s funny how people find my poems 🙂
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