
This poem was meant to be a glorious thing,
To really take off, even sprout wings
But somewhere, somehow it took a wrong turn,
The vision got lost, the fuel failed to burn
So I switched phrases furiously, here and there
Sentences too, to give it more zest, flair
But I saw it wasn’t working, I began to panic,
It was like rearranging deck chairs on the Titanic.
Oh you shuffled those chairs oh so well; very cleverly I might add.
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thanks, I had fun with this one: like the Titanic I didn’t know where it was heading; a bit shocked when I found out 🙂
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Sometimes, there’s no good way to stack them. Then, take those chairs and toss them overboard, or better yet dive in. You can swim even when your vessel sinks. 😉
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I like the way you carried on with the metaphor 🙂
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Yeah, derby really helped me turn-stop my life 😉 My daughter’s skating is coming along. A bit tricky here with lack of rinks.
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it’s very tricky with lack of rinks; are you in a major city of Germany?
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Yes, I’m in Munich. May as well be the countryside, though, as it’s been shut down since October.
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Despite all our good
intentions and wishes
many a poem ends up
sleeping with the fishes 🐟
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HaHaHa ; sadly true, David 😦 but it doesn’t stop us choofing on 🙂
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Some sail on serenely, others take fanciful flight, but many more sink unforgotten to that poetical seabed of silent shells.🙂
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oh I love that, Hobbo; well said 🙂
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🙂
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and I can hear the band playing…
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don’t think it was dark side of the moon’ though 🙂
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))
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John!
The Titanic sunk, but your poem didn’t stunk.
Ok, that doesn’t work, and that’s why you’re the poet and I’m not.
Great rhythm, really enjoyed. 😀
Have a great weekend,
xo
eden
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thanks, Eden; you too 🙂
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Such a common conundrum. At least there’s always the Titanic band playing as our plotting, structure, and wit sink beneath our feet!
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love that comment, Matthew; luckily we sometimes get it right 🙂
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No panic on the titanic as long you know how to lower the lifeboat!
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LOL
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