
Some of my poems end up like this,
bashed, broken , bent beyond repair,
car wrecks,
the ones you don’t usually see
in the showroom
of my blog,
the ones abandoned in the junkyard
out the back,
but sometimes I remember a part that worked
when the rest of the poem didn’t
and I go down & look for it amongst
all that scrap metal
of words
misshapen phrases
give it a polish, an oil change
a bit of love
& fit it into the poem I’m working on now
so the old gives vigor
to the new.
It works every time.
The poem mechanic. I like it. 😀 Never a spanner short.
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I saw that wreck on the side of the road and my immediate thought was : some of my poems look like this 🙂 thanks for the spanner comment 🙂
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The boneyard of words, phrases and I’ll fitted thoughts. I loved this whole concept of “parts”.
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thanks Elle; I left the poem in the workshop for a few days while my ace mechanic went over it 🙂 when you get a good metaphor you gotta ‘milk it’ for all its worth 🙂
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You’re welcome. Absolutely! 😁
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always something worth salvaging
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always, Beth, always 🙂
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I liked all of this John……
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how could you not, Don? only kidding: it was slow-cooked for 36 hours and there was a fair chance it’d turn out well; thanks for the compliment, Don 🙂
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Some of mine have overheard you….why can’t I be slow-cooked for 36 hours they say instead of being dished up raw-medium? Tuff luck I say…..be grateful you make it to the screen….they don’t understand the effort I go through for them……
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ROFL !!!!! very clever, Don: I’ll pay that 🙂
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I’ts a good book worth reading John……they also danced…pole dancing……naked, as all stobies are…..although some were tattood with aboriginal motifs….oh, the pine poles have their picnic on another date if you were wondering……perhaps we should suggest they combine in this day of integration and cultural mixing?….
I smell material for a flight of fancy here….
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I must say, Don: you are in top form: you have a very quick wit ; I think you’re ready for a flight of fancy: you should have material for a few posts, Don 🙂
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The extended metaphor works well. We are all the sum of our component parts!
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hanks Hobbo: I like the challenge that extended metaphor poems provide —
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Oh yes, those old scrapbook treasure chests! I love to rummage around in my old discarded notebooks on occasion and as you mentioned something precious might be found and after some polishing can take on an unexpected glow.
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I like the way you say that, Michael: which is why, of course, we keep our old notebooks– mine go back with a few omissions to 1989 —
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How large a scrap yard you working with, John? Those shards, fragments and slightly bent parts are perfect puzzle pieces later one, are they not? Your poem is a clever reminder to dig, polish and change the oil, sometimes. Enjoyed.
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thanks, Karen; my scrapyard goes way back to ’89; there’s 1000’s of discarded pieces to choose from 🙂
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Oooh, wish I could visit.
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Sometimes a junkyard can be beautiful also but I’m glad the English language has mechanics like you!
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Lol; thanks Ulle 🙂
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🙂 there’s a lot of material to potter around; and the good thing is, although it looks a mess to the outsider, I know roughly where things are 🙂
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I am editing my poetry from 40 years ago. It is hard work. Old age had taught me to use less commas and stay in tense. I still need a editor. I write my words and I am thankful. People like. You and I write like Bukowski. Honest, not polite. Good evening John from almost Spring Michigan.
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good day to you, John; that is a tribute: write like Bukowski: a hero of mine 🙂 editing your poems from 40 years ago! wow, that is a task: take it steady, John; no rush —
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Bukowski didn’t try to impress. Salinger was my favorite. He wanted no-one to change one word he wrote. Us, who love to write. Our poetry and story. Our babies. I have time. I am semi-retired. Working 20 hours a week. I want a book of poetry and short stories done by June. Good evening from Michigan.
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wow! that’s not long; keep us posted. Salinger is one of my favourites: a few of his short stories and Catcher in the Rye which I taught for years when I taught High School English. Cheers. John from Down Under 🙂
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I have read all his books in the past year. His style is different than Hemingway. He made the characters come alive. My favorite of Salinger is. His short stories. Cheers from Michigan.
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Mine too, John especially ‘A Perfect Day for Bananafish’ 🙂
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