
Please Wait to be Called,
the sign said
So I did.
I took a ticket and waited
behind the others
till it was my turn
at the head of the queue
outside the draughty pearly gates
holding my flimsy little ticket
& when, growing impatient,
I stepped forward,
St. Peter held up his hand:
“There seems to be some problem,”
He said.
“You’ll have to wait a little longer,”
I stamped my feet a little
when a white light flashed overhead
& a door opened behind
& I was whooshed back
to the operating theatre where the surgeons
had revived me.
One step from paradise.
pic courtesy of Pinterest,com
Gosh. I am glad it was the surgeon, not a dude with red horns! I do like the idea of stomping impatiently about outside the Pearly Gates like it was the NRMA or the butcher or the Apple Store. A lovely, surprising end to an intriguing poem.
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thanks, Worms; needless to say I had great fun writing it 🙂
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Fantastic! Really thought provoking. There is a line in one of the songs from Social Distortion “there must be a heaven, cuz I already done my time in hell”. Sometimes I wonder if there is 3 places or only 2.
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🙂 thanks Ulle; I don’t know the group but I love the quote !! I hope there’s a heaven, Ulle and I get to see the woman again I write about in that poem ‘Wished I Never Knew’ 🙂
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Plot twist!
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a close call 🙂 I don’t know what St. Peter made of the sudden disappearance 🙂
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a close call, indeed!
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you wouldn’t want it to be any closer, Beth 🙂
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The ending got me, I didn’t see that coming. Well done!
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that’s the Ace you’ve got up your sleeve, Bob; you can’t write Flash Fiction without that Ace 🙂
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woww
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thank you:)
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Well done! Not what I expected at all.
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thanks Becky; glad you enjoyed 🙂
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Guess the queue gives us sacred time to reconsider or be reconsidered. Would pleading have helped? No back entrances? Very much enjoyed.
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thanks, K: I had no say in the matter 🙂 it was win-win either way 🙂
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Those meddling medical do-gooders! 😷
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Lol. thank you David; it was quite a blow 🙂
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a close call, eh? 🙂
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very close 🙂
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😃
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