
People who live here, he said, live with their backs to the sea.
And I said, how could anyone turn their backs to the sea?
And I thought of mum, before she was hauled away, saying,
I want to go back to the sea again,
how she sounded like Miranda the mermaid who had strayed
from her home
but when she got her wish, when we got her into a retirement home
on the esplanade, she grew jaded.
What’s wrong, mum? we asked.
I want to go home, she said. I want to go back where I lived with dad.
But you’ve got a ringside seat, mum, to the Southern Ocean. A view to die for.
It’s not the same, she said, not when you see the same thing day after day.
But we sat with her, watching the red sun sit on the lip of the horizon like a wafer,
the seabirds flying home, and a kind of calm settled on her.
Beautifully poignant, John.
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thanks, David: there are so many emotions mixed up in this;
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Wow, so much feeling in this. Very powerful.
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thanks Lucy: I ran it past my artist friend who suggested it was a little verbose so I whittled some stuff away and she said, yes, that’s it 🙂
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I do not know how I feel about this poem, but I must say being speechless about this may have been because this poem has its own powerful nature. Love it! 😇
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thank you 🙂
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You are welcome. 😊
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Yes, I think poignant is right. It’s a conflicted poem, reflected in your Mum’s competing nostalgias. Does the poem answer the question “how can anyone turn their backs to the sea?”. Or does it reinforce it? I don’t know. But the end is lovely. A unified breathing…
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I don’t know how to answer that, Worms; it’s a poem about my mother, in her last years, about a love for the sea, and also a love for a home that no longer exits — and in the end a calm togetherness —
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Yes. All that definitely comes through beautifully. 🙂
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Absolutely one of your best, John, in my humble opinion. That first stanza, and the second-to-last…just fantastic. Melancholic and beautiful.
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thanks very much, Matthew; that means a lot 🙂
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A calm togetherness nicely sums up this beautiful poem.🙂
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nicely put, Hobbo: the poem came as a surprise, from that opening sentence I read in a Camille Bourdas story called ‘Orange’; from such small beginnings , a poem grows 🙂
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Very well done! 🙂
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This is so sad. Have to be in the mother’s place to feel her sorrow. It’s not easy to leave your home and familiarity. The despair of old age.
Well written, John. 🙂
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there is so much I wanted to capture in this poem; in the end I just let the poem write itself and I think it is better for it 🙂
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so bittersweet and lovely, John
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thank you, Beth; the poem surprised me, what I wrote but I went with it: it was genuine if somewhat painful —
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Everyone has said what I would have already. So I’ll just 👏🏼
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Good to hear from you, Elle ; thanks 🙂
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Thank you, John; you’re welcome. 🙂
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This was beautiful
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🙂 when’s that mouse one coming up ?
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It’s coming out in a few weeks. 😊😊😊
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bugger! I have to wait that long? 😦
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yep!😦 Just a few weeks though😉
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okay 😦
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I have always loved the sea and I will always love the sea where we spread my dear, dear mother’s ashes. It’s sight nearly always calms my soul. Thanks for the poem about your dear mom and that sacred place.
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your mum must have loved the sea too; good to hear from you 🙂
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What can I say, just beautiful. It is clear that it came from the deepest pockets of your heart.
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it did, Ulle; often I was barely aware of what I was writing —
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The ocean’s reddish color was either the color of rust or of blood. A ship had sunk here many years ago and was still rusting on the seafloor. But men had fought viciously hard, here, recently. It was a toss-up what it was.
— Catxman
http://www.catxman.wordpress.com
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I like your alternative story: it opens a whole new., gritty vista 🙂
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Outstanding John.
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thank you:it seems to have struck a chord with people 🙂
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Narrative and impressive!
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thanks; good to have a new reader 🙂
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