
You can’t all be in it, I say.
It’s not like a clown’s car. See how many you can cram in.
It’s a poem.
But they don’t listen.
A simple poem about a change in weather and everybody wants a part:
the tawny frogmouth clacking in the crotch of the peppercorn tree,
the palm fronds all a fluster, the shed door banging like castanets,
the Scrabble tiles flying off the board, all peeved,
the sky itself wearing its overcoat, grey and squally —
it’s rather proud of that;
no, no, no I say,
as I drive off, everyone hanging on for dear life
Haha! Perfect metaphor for editing! Love it.
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editing can be the hardest thing —
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oh, hah, i so love this! it hard to cut your own word babies -)
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exquisitely expressed, Beth; there’s a similar saying: you’ve got to ‘kill your darlings’ ; I like yours better 🙂
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You forgot the flower squirting boutonniere. Fun, John. Lucky, you have all these players begging to be put in the game. Send a few of your rejects my way, why don’t ya? 😉
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hahaha; hilarious K: you’re welcome to them but be warned — my off cuts are surly and rambunctious and don’t take rejection lying down 🙂
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Let the wild rumpus start! 😉
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love your attitude, K: god knows where it might lead 🙂 but I’m sure it will lead to a fun, topsy turvy world 🙂
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Catchy!
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thanks Becky. I enjoyed the clowns car best of all 🙂
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Super! Love the imagery!
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🙂 thanks Worms; a bit frustrating I couldn’t manage to put it into a nice little poem, a vignette perhaps, instead of this rambunctious mess
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I love this clever metaphor, so funny.😂
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I coulda done better, Hobbo, I coulda done better: could have painted a calm word picture of the sky unravelling but then I wouldn’t have captured the unruliness of it all
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😂 We live in a world that is truly unruly…
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I guess we gotta make do with what we’ve got then 🙂
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Guess so! 😊
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Lol! You did manage to fit them in there. That’s clever and efficient, John. 🙂
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thanks Terveen: it was a struggle until I remembered the image of all those clowns cramming into one jalopy I had in my file 🙂
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Clever! These people do nurture desperation….
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everybody wants to get in on the act 🙂
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This is very clever. So that’s where you took off in the little blue Subaru!
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hahahaha; very witty Ulle — the idea that one post can bleed into another 🙂
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A clown car is the perfect metaphor John! Just like some people who have verbal diarrhea, so do some writers!
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🙂 wonderfully expressed, Eden 🙂
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Clowns can be frightening. Look at the new movie version of IT by Stephen King. I think of crocodiles lying in wait in tropical ponds. Just waiting. Waiting. Or the wasp that lays it eggs in that spider. The babies come digging their way out … Yes, clowns and nature alike can be fearful things.
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there’s a name for that condition; clowns can be quite creepry. The original version of IT was scary enough
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