You look like a newt
in yr birthday suit
she said with clear élan.
A little blemished.
Somewhat unfinished.
A strange fit of a man.
I’ve read yr text.
I know what’s next
& up the stairs she ran
What She Saw
John Malone
playful panda
You look like a newt
in yr birthday suit
she said with clear élan.
A little blemished.
Somewhat unfinished.
A strange fit of a man.
I’ve read yr text.
I know what’s next
& up the stairs she ran
John Malone 
Is she going to find him a toad? I’m intrigued, and wondering what’s awaiting her: man or amphibi-man.
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that’s it, K: the lines came to me in a dream and when I awoke I dashed them down; that’s it: my Kubla Khan: I’m afraid to add anything: can you add to it, perhaps ? or should it be left as it is — unfinished?
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Out of water, discolored skin, she wept her tears and wetted him. She would not leave his side again, this moment, sink or swim. ~It doesn’t need anything, as it’s wonderful as is. These are just my on the way to sleep thoughts.
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a beautiful, romantic ending; thanks for that, K: the thoughts on the way to sleep are sometimes the most enticing and — eerie —
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love this out of the box creation – I say leave it as is
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thanks for your faith in my little ‘dream’ story, Beth; I won’t change a thing !
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Some great lines in here, such as “a strange fit of a man.”
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thanks, Neil; would never have thought of that line consciously: I had seen it written somewhere, made an impression and slipped into my subconscious 🙂
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Strange…but that’s what I like. Well done John.
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it is eerie — and that’s what I like about it too: the subconscious is good at things like that 🙂
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It instills a sense of foreboding, Great poem. John.
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thanks, I like that: ‘a sense of foreboding ‘ —
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I like the fun and frolic in this one. Seems it might get steamy too. 🙂
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I love this line > ‘A strange fit of a man.’
It reminds me of the line in “Piano Man” …. ‘when I wore a younger man’s clothes’
A really fun piece of foreplay. 😉
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thanks Eden; and I’m a great fan of ‘The Piano Man’ —- ‘
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I’ll be back in a few days’ time: I expect we’ll find him suitably chastised but not crushed: an under-cooked salmon is not a hanging offense 🙂
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