
On the shortest day
I take the longest run
between one jetty and the next
and back again
rest myself against the rump
of a dune
listen to the sea shanties of the waves
while a mermaid appears, rises above the waves
swinging her wild, wild hair
in the sun-drenched breeze
until spotting me she coyly slips
beneath the water.
The jetty wades a little deeper into the sea
to catch a glimpse.
On the shortest day I tell
the tallest tales.
This is what makes folklore. Nicely done, I also appreciate the word play β¦ rump of the dune. ππ»π
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thanks, Elle: a playful piece π
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Yes it is. Youβre welcome. π
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This is the magic of myth and the exaggeration of beautiful imagination. Your words spin a tale and also a tail – the mermaidβs.
Wonderful!!
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thanks Terveen: I wasn’t happy with it till I got the flash fiction ending: and here in Oz it is the shortest day —
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The longest here in India, John. That means we balance out. π
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of course, I forgot: you’re in India —
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I love this, John! The rump of the dune. The images. The tallest tale. It’s all wonderful.
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thanks Worms; an inspired piece written on the hop during a sunny beach walk on the shortest day π btw good to hear from you π
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Thanks, John. Recovering from my first round of chemo. Turns out it vacuums brain cells as well as cancer cells. π
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oh dear: that’s a bit scary π¦
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Love the wading jetty and the coy mermaid, John. Tall tales are best told on short days. More, please.
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thanks, K; I’ll see what I can come up with ; i’ve been nice to the Muse this week — I haven’t overworked her — hopefully she’ll be nice to me π
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I’m sure. Just one smile, and she’ll be ready for another turn around the dance floor. At least, that’s what I imagine.
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ummm; come to think of it: the mermaid’s smile was enticing before hse coyly disappeared π
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It’s all about the cat and mouse chase, John. You know this. She’s waiting for you to dive in after her, I bet. π
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the water will have to get warmer first π
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No wet suit? π
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; ahh yes, the wet suit; I like the way you think π
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ooh, i love this one –
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thank you, Beth π
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You have a way with ending. Well Done.
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π thanks Bob: you’re right — without the ending, it’s just a series of images —
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Beware of the Siren’s song, John.
Was she singing?
Love the visuals you have evoked.
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she may have been but she couldn’t be heard over the sea shanties the waves were singing π
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I can see this so clearly in my mind!
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it’s interesting; what I actually saw on this shortest day of 18 degrees celsius was some shaggy haired man in a puffer jacket and black shorts standing waist deep in the cold water hugging himself; he became the mermaid π
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Makes an interesting image for a mermaid:)
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yes, the transformation was remarkable: the young man would not have recognised himself π
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And just think, he’s walking (swimming?) around out there, somewhere, totally unaware of his fame!
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Just loved it. Also a reminder that the earth is round. Here in Sweden it is the longest day just barely dark.
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π thanks Ulle; so now the days are getting a little longer each day: that has to be a cause for celebration π
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A salty long tale indeed, John. Enjoyed it.
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thanks Matthew; it was fun to write π
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So beautiful! I loved this π
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thank you; I had forgotten all about this: it does seem to be a popular poem π
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